Friday, July 16, 2010

Tropical storm

Drip
Drop
Crackle
Pop
Rain falling down
Plip
Plop
Patter
Slop
All on the ground
Drip drip drip
DROP
Crackle crackle crackle
POP
Plip plop
Patter slop
A thunderstorms around
Flash flash
Boom crash
Lightning lightning
THUNDER
Smash smash
Rooms trashed
From dangerous winds and
Others
Clouds part
Sun starts
To peek and say
Hello
But clouds as a cart
Contain its heart
Should it stay
Or should it go?

3 comments:

  1. cute! sounds like a children's song. have you ever tried stanzas? you can use spaceing to emphasize and give the reader time to enjoy your poem as they go through it. it's a pretty big piece don't ya think?

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  2. well i could have shortened it up but then it wouldnt have had emphasis on some of the words like i wanted i think its more fun to read it the way it is :)

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